Love the idea of exploring, even if it is sounding rather dangerous. Nice little bit of story. Only critique would be that words like ‘somewhat’, ‘kind of’, and in this one ‘fairly’ can take some of the oomph out of your writing. If you can do without them, great. If you can find a more specific modifier, even better!
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Jesse Blake
ElshaHawk (LoA)