this does not make sense: “and I saw them huddled between them” very good otherwise!

Yes, that one line was odd, but otherwise it had a nice, magical feel to it. Tragic end though. Has that sort of vague, poetic quality to it.

Nice touch, the fading colours after the blood roses beginning … and how jealousy destroys both of you.

Very nice work, C!

Good point, Pyro – that line was supposed to read “saw him huddled between them” … thanks for the nice comments :)

You changed the title, C — I think I liked it better the way it was before, because The Marriage encompassed both the wedding itself and the aftermath. Still a great piece!

This is awsome!! Thanks for entering!

… er, is it obvious enough who they are …? (didn’t want to put it in the tags, and give it away…)

Well, I think it’s obvious who he is… she could be one of a couple emotions but I think it’s clear enough. I wouldn’t worry about it. :-)

i thought it was wondeful. Life sometimes doesn’t make sense man this was good way to write with emotional content. I am so glad this is featured because it really shows how on that day no matter what he was or how dim or dull his luster was she shinned, even after death she shinned. that is brilliant literaly brilliant.

it gave me tears in my eyes my wife asked what was wrong and i said nothing baby, but did i ever tell you how beautiful you were on our wedding day.
That is how good this is.

Vivid and disturbing and beautiful in all the right parts.