Forbidden teller in the title!

the pie is a nice touch! do they like pie? lol.

I didn’t like the pie. I thought it was silly and out of place for the otherwise carefully told and serious story about impending adventure. Nice touch with the naming issue.

I think the pie brings a touch of humanity to this otherwise grand tale. Maybe the abrupt contrast would be softened if the line was something like “Maybe I should have brought a pie”. Great fic, though. Thanks!

Title changed. I had nothing better at the time.

Thanks guys :) I was indecisive about the pie as well, but it’s there and it stays. I have no characters left to modify the sentence, and if I start editing then the air might come out of it.

Revised Title improved the story!!! this goes into my final three, will sleep on it.