Ouch very painful, and you did a nice job of skirting the issue for most of it without being too obvious. Some of the writing goes a bit too far and winds up a bit hard to follow, but perhaps you meant some of the vagueness to be there. Very effective little piece.

okay, first, let me help you fix some things. The first paragraph is full of ’her’s.. the last sentence, I thought the mom was touching her own face.. I say instead of hte last ‘her’ say ‘the child’s’ or something to let us know which ‘her’ you meant. Secondly, her arms wrapped carefully around the child as if she was scared of breaking her. It was too wordy..

And lastly, I like the moment in time, very bittersweet, but what could be unforgivable about being broken, and broken how, mentally or physically, because time heals all wounds. Life is too short to not forgive. ;)

Wow, the last line is quite epic. “Why did God make me broken?” Intense.

I agree with Elsha though, too many hers and that makes things confusing. You can’t tell which “her” you’re really talking about.