Very exciting with a lot going on. It might be an easier read broken up into paragraphs. The ending wound up a bit of an abrupt reveal you could have played out a bit longer for more dramatic effect.
it would have been funny if they would have been werearmadillos noone ever turns into a werearmadillo or wereardvark. that wouyld be cool. nice story though.
there’s a lot of flames.. yeah paragraphs would be nice, it kind of reads like a long run-on sentence. but some awesome action and a big reveal here! if you slowed it down and added some details, this would make great flash fiction!
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