i read em both but i was too much in a hurry to get to number two to comment on number one sorry this was good i liked it and i like the unicorns we gotta save them.
I love how she found her resolve.

I was bullied in school. It really sucks. Trust me, though, it does end. Having said that, it took me 20 years to fully get over it.

I like what you’re saying in this story. Your delivery is a little direct for me, with lots of did this, then that, then the other. What did the room smell like, did the light, streaming in through the windows from the early evening sun make the dust dance the a jig it learnt a million years ago? How does it make you feel?

A couple of practical notes: separate your tags with commas, and your first “whom” should be “who”.

“Whom” is the accusative form of “who”, that is, it is used as the object of a sentence. In “who kicked whom?”, the first is the subject (doing the kicking), so is nominative (“who”); the second is the object (being kicked), so is accusative (“whom”). So now you know.

Most importantly, keep writing. Practise is essential for improvement.