Haha! This is kinda scary if you look at it as a metaphor for actual gang violence, etc. but the thought of a pool club mafia makes me lol. Really well written!

I agree with OrangeOreos. The metaphor is great, nice job.

and you’re out of here!
so does she gain some status with this move? I think so.

Since my wife and I have been watching a marathon of Gossip Girl lately (don’t ask), this little scene would have fit perfectly into what we’ve been marinating our brains with lately. :)

Oh yeah, and I think “she put on her neon green sunglasses with a flourish” counts as a tip of the fedora.

Beautifully executed. I’m terrified of these people.