Good addition; it’s nice to see a source of conflict finally introduced. I really like the description of the clock in 1st paragraph.

You repeated “cheery”, though, which was probably intentional, but still didn’t sound right.

You know….

Pod people are always like that…. at first.

by the way. love the series.

This is great, easygoing, readable stuff. Looking really forward to Ben’s next instalment!!!

Pod people? Possible, RYD. I was thinking poorly (or exceedingly thoroughly) programmed clones.

Thanks for the critique, Stovo. I went in and changed it, for the better, I hope.

@ Radical Yellow Duck & Textual Phoenix:

I was thinking Stepford Employees.

At THX:

Wonderful continuation of the series, very in keeping with tone.

Aha! Nice to see someone else getting involved! A wonderfully fun addition to the series. Welcome aboard! :D

Followed Thx right here. Will catch up with the series when I’m not quite so tired. Anyway, I love the mood in the scene setting. It sounds like an utterly hateful place to work.

While I was reading it, I thought “uh oh, this woman sounds dangerous” and, sure enough “trouble”.

Like it.

Your descriptions flow like falling dominoes, fast and cohesive and thoughtfully arranged to make a beautiful picture. Way to add some depth to the story without distracting or derailing!