i’ll have to read the prequel i got lost

This seems to have… er… very little to do with the established theme and story. So… er…

…Yeah.

i think what Kid was trying to do was introduce a new charcter subloy as not to interfere with your main story??
good story though and intersting feminist character.
Don’t let it get you down kid i get sequeled around constantly lol.

yeah doesn’t flow with the prequels, but Eric sounds like a really outgoing guy, and poor Jewel seems like a witty, dry humored, overworked girl. :) nice.

Seems like it could run concurrent, as long as it doesn’t completely contradict, a different perspective on the strange happenings at this idyllic firm.

As a former temp, I have extreme sympathy for Jewels.

The Point of View of the story completely changed from first person to third, which is always jarring.

The lack of paragraph separations made it impossible to tell who was speaking in several locations.

Aside from those, I think it might fit.

For grammar reasons, I must take away a pencil.

This is just an example of making someone else’s story into one of my past experiences. I know it doesn’t fit very well, sorry ‘bout that. I’m just beginning here on ficly you know ;-)

That’s one of the weird things about this site. Since you can jump into any story mid-stream, it’s easy to lose the context or broader themes of an ongoing series. When I see how many chapters of a story have been written so far, I’m sad to admit, I often don’t bother reading any of it. It would take too long, so I ignore the series altogether and look for something shorter.

Sometimes though I’ll take the time to start reading a series at the beginning and go through the whole thing. When I do, it’s usually very rewarding. :-)