A lovely window onto one of those beautiful moments of adolescence (or so it seems to be).

A few things about the writing:

‘passed midnight’ – should be ‘past’.
‘continued to stare up at the sky talking’ – perhaps a comma after sky would show that they are talking, rather than they’re staring at a talking sky :)

Some of the identifiers in quoted speech, e.g “Not completely.” He agreed… should perhaps be a comma rather than full stop between, to keep the flow.

Hope this is useful advice!

Thanks for the comment, Match. I took your advice and fixed them. ^^ I think it looks much better now. Thanks!

Last sentence, “ever really be apart”. I’m very tough about endings because that’s where you’re supposed to (in my book anyway) leave a mark.

This piece kind of hurts to read, personally. But I like it.

It’s good. Really good.