Fun continuation and gets us inside the protagonist’s head a bit more. You jump between tenses, which is distracting and a few distracting grammar/typo things as well. Could use some polish.

i’m on it

alright, I fixed it.

You’ve done a pretty good job of representing Barkley and Charles. I feel like some of it is a little repetitive after the prior installment—Charles’ disgruntled reaction with blood, starting off new, etc. Regardless, good work! I enjoyed it.

Thank you. I know what you mean by repetitive, but when I was writing it I was kind of trying to make Barkely seem like a polite kind of guy. For some reason I imagine him as a british guy.

Hahaha. British does bring out the clever bit in him. And I so know what you mean by the polite thing—I can’t imagine him as being anything but utterly well-mannered with Charles.

Yeah, it’d have to be that way just to confuse Charles.

To confuse him, or to lure him in. smiles evilly

Yup