Comments on Maybe you fall Marie by Lth{IX}

THX 0477

Sounds more like song lyrics than a story, not that there’s anything inherently wrong with that.
- Posted over 10 years ago.
Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

Yeah maybe,
i know you are all alone
you still have
me,
maybe your boy-friend
is gone,
he dont
love you
any more
he never
does Marie?…
(Plz leasen to me)
i know?
I know!!
You dont
You don’t need
You don’t need him!
You need….time
time to remind you
My time
My time
me
me
me

If The poet A.R Ammons had written the same poem this is how it would have looked.
Same words
A.R Ammons style, this is what it reminded me of i love this poet thanks for the nostalgia.
- Posted over 10 years ago.
- 5 out of 5
Ben Paddon

This feels like bad RnB.
- Posted over 10 years ago.
- 1 out of 5
Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

Ben she is from greece and her english isnt top drawer she should get like fifty pencils for trying.
- Posted over 10 years ago.
- 5 out of 5
Lth{IX}

Hahah you think that is a bad RnB>>>Hahaha

Might-Joe Young I AM A BOY YOU STUPID
- Posted over 10 years ago.
Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

if i had a nickel for ever time someone has called me you stupid.
or everytime someone said i am a boy you stupid lol….
- Posted over 10 years ago.
- 5 out of 5
Lth{IX}

Haha…..man you are unbelievable.And i can not stant it that my english is not top…my english is fine dude<<?
- Posted over 10 years ago.
Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

hey i am not one to talk about anyones english because its the only freakin language i am fluent in and i still cant write in it, but yeah your english is fine.
hey is that kurasaki ichigo in your pic?
Hey didnt you like how i rewrote your poem? I was trying to be sweet, you big meanie face.hehehehehe
- Posted over 10 years ago.
- 5 out of 5