see i could inside your brain, i knew you would have no sex, and no dope. i am like a prophet. dont worry ill sequel and get your boy laid and high i got it.

Damn, too much work! You beat me to sequeling it… and MJY, easy there, killer!

lol!
You know me too well! why can’t I cyberpunkit clean? huh?
oo i made a new word.

“In the back of my mind I prepared for the day it is hacked and won’t let me in.” That sentence sounded a little off.

The rest of it seemed pretty good, and the ending was nice.

hm okay… I’ll work on it..

Very exciting and fun stuff. I like that the oh-so-confident, high-tech thief is showing some vulnerability in this bit.

Dude! This guy is quick on his feet! Then again, I suppose he has to be, what-with his profession of choice.

And this is just getting better and better.

awesome EH. this is so not your usual genre but it feels gritty and edgy. keep going!

What is Mephisto? Who is Sprock? Is the little old lady some kind of government spy or just really paranoid? So many questions!

Do we know that the protagonist is male? Are we all just assuming? For me, I assumed a woman.

Either way, it’s an intriguing start.

Elsha I had to have a go at your expense as I DO NOT USUALLY DO CYBERPUNK.LOL

Heehee, I just realized that the old lady’s name is almost Spock. Almost.

Mephisto? a faust-like demon?

Exciting continuation.