this is nice, I like the last line because it reminds me of how sometimes I need to “remember to breathe” except that’s like the opposite lol

I am not worthy (I am bowing to you) Good work, I also liked the prequel.

Your sequel fits, but it’s totally and completely you: the phrasing, the story it told, all new and you baby! It started out with depicting desirable things, and shifted to an ignorance so complete that it stripped the meaning of living away.

thnx a ton guys :)

Those last two lines are awesome,
and the poem overall is very good.
Thanks for sequeling!!

This is awesome! It’s so pure and sweet, and idyllic. i agree with Blossom

@StudMuffin..thnx..nothin feels better than the author of the prequel saying that the sequel is good..thnx :)

@ElsaHawk..thnx..

wow you really captured muffy’s theme.
i love your pic too

@Mighty-Joe thnx…:)

Nice one