It’s depressing, but it does a good job on the ‘bait and switch’ first paragraph, all the positive things about Friday night couched in the ‘for those other people’ sort of phrases. Brutal but felt very real. I’m undecided on the last line. I know the attitude and have seen it often enough in the downtrodden so it rings true, but here it takes a little bit away from the character’s dejected state.
I’d agree that the last line doesn’t quite work, THX. I just couldn’t think of anything better to leave it on and it seemed a bit incomplete without a final line like that.
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