Not sure how to feel about this character. She seems happy about Friday night, but by some of the description I’m not sure if it’s a genuine happiness. Challenging and thought provoking, in a good way, though I’m not sure if you meant it that way. Some of the sentence structure in the long, middle paragraph felt off, like the sentence starting with ‘Though’. It wound up a little hard to follow structurally, I think.
I get this girl, having enough to splurge on one burger, but it would be an unnecessary waste of gas.. and also being called all day, requested for one task or another, those moments alone in bed are awesome!
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Silven