good stuff mate, only thing I’d say is watch with the shifts between 1st and 3rd perspective, it doesnt work as well if your jumping between the two

Dang…a world where emotion is outlawed.

When I finally got this…wow. (In a good way.)

Thanks all. I did notice ‘that would be violation 6751’ should be ‘that would have been violation 6751’ need to be more thorough on my proof reading in the future.