I love the whole thos you are building.

ah, teh tie-in, very beautiful!

Yes, very nice tie-in. I like the subtle change of time, so it still has many aspects of the old, but enough elements of the new. I like the legend, too.

One quibble: stories on ficly are easier to read if you double space the paragraphs. It’s the best substitute for indenting and it’s normally worth it even if you’re short on characters. Also, there are a few extra commas in there.

Anyway, content itself is good.