This is very intriuging. You need a period after spot. But i am hardly the one to say that because i am the king of runnons.hehehehe
i like this and keep going. Welcome to ficly.

thanks for the notice, I’m really bad with, you know that whole… grammar… thing.

I appreciate the comment.

hey you should get a pic. And dude i am so bad with grammer. I just found out i am dyslexic, i guess that has something to do with it. oh yeah and i am lazy, and elmore leonards work corrupted me too. hehehehe

Nice, I can’t wait to read more! Where’s crazy Larry?

@might-joe, I’ll see about the picture thing, thanks.

m, that felt like a lot of @’s, thanks
you know, if you really wanna know where crazy Larry is…. keep reading, haha.

anyway thanks for the support and kind words.

yeah some difficulty reading without commas and periods, unless you’re dyslexic, but a very intriguing beginning!

Sorry, it’s late, and I wound up totally distracted by the run-on sentences. Seems like the story side of it has potential thought. I may just have to come back when I’m more awake.