I’m digging the mood, but I think some dialog would be a lot stronger than the middle description of what’s happening.

Woah….

Definitely a powerful moment. Has the feel of being in some primitive society, a small tribal setting.
Might have worked slightly better to mention ceremonial face paint or decoration or something early on, so the ending excuse for black tears isn’t so out-of-the-blue.
Still, very strong little bit of storytelling.

Also, just had to say I liked the gender role reversal there with the man as property and women as aggressive/violent. Always fun to buck Western traditional roles and views of gender.

she won the right to the ex husband.. harsh, brutal ritual. She must be queen..