moving.

whoa! that was not what I expected..

For some reason, the last sentence completes this for me – it completely defines the tone, retroactively. Very well done.

Wow. Taking a big story that your readers already know, and shifting it to a truly personal one that they don’t. The last line seals it by revealing what’s shifted in the narrator… very powerful.

And, of course, a fitting tip of the hat towards the date of the challenge… is there anyone that doesn’t take at least a moment to recall that day?

That last sentence definitely caught me – what is he going to do next?!

Rushes to the sequel.