So – Gene Simmons and Paul Stanley were President and Vice President – Peter Criss was Secretary of Defense, and Ace Frehley was Head of the Joint Chiefs?
I like the interesting setup for an alternate future. “Face paint” is the last two words of the last two sentences, which throws the reader (well, me at least) a little bit off. I don’t know what else can be done to it (maybe change the first “face paint” to something like makeup. I dunno). But anyway, I liked the story overall.
I figure if you’re wearing burlap on the outside, the only real option is silk underthings. Mmm, silky underthings. Nice job on a quick telling of a large story.
I imagined kids starting with Cindi Lauper-style blue eye shadow and then going full-on clown… I read Clay Shirky’s Here Comes Everybody, and there’s a section about protests – that if oppressive regimes don’t crack down right away, they build very quickly because people start to feel impervious. I don’t know where this story came from for me, it just did.
I’m glad you guys picked up on the 80’s vibe! I was thinking of it filmed like Brazil or Max Headroom while I was writing it.. total 80’s dystopian future. I think there’s potential for exploring Beigeworld in other stories… maybe.
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