I like the idea, but first, some spelling issues need to be addressed. ie, assassin. I believe immediatly is spelled wrong too, but I don’t know how to spell it properly, so you can feel free to call me a hypocrite. Maybe the catching can be more dramatic, more of a focal point? It didn’t seem very major, but really is the pinnacle of this story. Overall, you ideas are amazing, and I really enjoyed the story. Just a few technicalities and you’re on your way!
Amaris Wolfe