Yeah, its awful, I know. I just had to get it out of my head.

no, this is good, it’s the story of falling in love. too bad the other person doesn’t show it back outwardly.

I really, really like the arrangement/rhyme scheme of the first stanza. The rest is good too, but I thought that part deserved special attention. :)

aww, it’s always hard to go through that.

I agree with beauty, the first stanza’s scheme is fantastic, and sold me on reading the rest.

My thought would be that the “ninja stealth” sort of takes me out of it right there at the end – I mean, don’t get me wrong, I appreciate a good ninja as much as the next guy, but it seemed sort of goofy following the rest of the poem.

Yeah I know, I’m working on a better word…

Better word found! …Hopefully.