“I said the things I neeed you to hear” that line speaks volumes…….

sometimes the barriers we put between ourselves and others are almost impossible to break. This story moved me. Thank you.

Very beautiful way of describing how we separate ourselves from others.

this really hits home elsha it is wonderfully written and it really says alot about the ways we imprison ourselves or as i like to justify it, as ‘protecting others from the contagous craziness that is my life’, by keeping them just out of the loop but stil closer than anyone else.

Nicely described making a beautiful metaphor for social interaction. Loved the nice dreamy feel.
By way of constructive criticism, the ‘But’ at the beginning of the fourth sentence isn’t necessary, and I think it’d be stronger without it.

yes the barriers we build are very strong, and hard to take down @Krully
thanks mama murph and kater for your wonderful comments
@THX, i kind of like it, the ‘but" it breaks up the desire from the justification behind it, and I guess I just talk that way. It is unnecessary, and English teachers may cringe, but I’m leaving it for Midwestern posterity. lol.
@MJY I’m not sure which of the characters is more self-imprisoned!

Oh, wow: I hug myself from the chill and watch you walk a few steps further away with no where to go . . . that alone is so powerful. This whole piece just peels away at the soul. Nice work.