aww, I think it’s always kinda sad when the last time you see a loved is at a hospital. It’s always too sad to see them like that, knowing it’s your last memory of them. It probably was hard to share this, but thanks for sharing :)

Dying in a bed can seem more gruesome than dying in a car crash, sometimes. Certainly much more depressing.

The Reese’s cups are such a dominant image in this story… makes me wonder: how did you feel about them afterwards?

Very sad. I appreciate the honesty in that last bit, the discomfort we all have around death and dying. Hint of resentment at the doctors for being “too late”?

I have been there! I went to see my aunt on her deathbed, she pulled the covers over her head. I don’t think she wanted me to remember her that way. The next day she slept a lot and didn’t really grunt to anyone, and I didn’t go to the hospital, instead i played lawn jarts with my sister, and that night was it.

I had the same thoughts as Cocci and THX. I assume Reese’s were her favorite, how do you feel about them now? And the last bit of honesty says a lot, we say we should leave to give them peace but a lot of times it’s really because we can’t bare to stand there and witness the inevitable, it’s human nature to go on the defense. If this is a real life event then I am truly sorry and thank you for sharing, if it’s an imaginative work then I applaud your ability to put yourself in these shoes and attempt to write about such a loss. I watched my grandma and cousin pass this way, it’s very hard, even though you know it’s coming.

This is a very touching, very real story. Sad to read about the death of a loved one in the Fact-ly challenge, but like THX and Ath said, I appreciate the honesty. You wrote this in such a vivid way that the scene came alive for me as if I were there myself.

This reminds me of my grandad being such a humble man and I could not bare to see him suffering with cancer. I would never want to see anyone so strong be reduced to just a shell. Great little story.

Very well written and so true. I will never forget going to see my husband’s grandmother dying in the hospital like that. All I could do was cry when I saw her.

Reminds me of my father and his mother. It was just heartbreaking both times.

Really like your use of white space here – echoes the emptiness of the story.

Well written, but so sad. :( Congrats on featured!

“The doctors, too late, said it was ovarian cancer.”

I think I know what you’re going for here, but it kinda comes out in a Yoda voice in my mind.

Grats on featured, AR.