I don’t really like running the whole poem together without breaks between verses, but I was over my character limit. :-)

I think it looks fine, but without the line breaks, some punctuation might be useful. I’m assuming it doesn’t fit either, though.

Unfortunately, this is nirvana! And I already had to do a lot of trimming to get it to fit, in the first place! Oh well, I still think it came out alright.