Can’t tell if I like this…too early in the AM. :)

i like this.

It’s nice and works very well as metaphor or allegory. And it reminds me of a cartoon I watched when I was younger, I think called ‘Water Babies’. But I might have the title wrong.

I really like your use of words in everything you have posted. Great job.

my dark and twisted muse of tragedy is a bit miffed at the sunny-side up fateful acceptance, but what does she know anyway. If she had her way, I would be writing Die Hard Fan Fiction. So, I liked it. It had a bunnies playing in daisies sort of feel to it. I don’t know if any of that made sense, but that’s my 5 pencil comment. Take it or leave it.

Haha…touche.
Thanks for the comments everyone. :)

Regarding the fateful acceptance, I’ll quote Joseph Conrad:
“In the destructive element immerse.”

oh, now that puts this in a wonderful new light that I hadn’t thought about.

An interesting story. Seemingly unrelated to the one that came before, except thematically. The first one was more kind of abstract, but this is…I guess abstract in a different way. Not playing games with word sounds, but taking the idea of a whirlpool and making it symbolic. Interesting.

True…though I’m not sure how it could have related except for thematically. It’s not a story so there are no characters, plot, etc. More of a “relation” than a sequel, I guess.