aw, i think you should write more! please? i like this a lot. it’s very real. <3
There will be more! This is the first part of a co-author challenge… TBC soon!
yay. i can’t wait to read more. :)
Well done on this, it was good fun to sequel, this should be interesting!
In stead of “Tammy Lecrae was currently very irritated because she was standing at a bus stop and the bus was late” Try something with more punch to it. If Tammy is standing somewhere, it’s understood that it’s current. -ing verbs do that. Something like “Tammy Lecrae checked her watch. The bus was late again, and patience was not her virtue.” This also gets the point across that Tammy is a sort of hot-head. And she times her days down to the minute.
In stead of “Tammy Lecrae was currently very irritated because she was standing at a bus stop and the bus was late”
Try something with more punch to it. If Tammy is standing somewhere, it’s understood that it’s current. -ing verbs do that.
Something like “Tammy Lecrae checked her watch. The bus was late again, and patience was not her virtue.”
This also gets the point across that Tammy is a sort of hot-head. And she times her days down to the minute.
Thanks for the feedback! :)
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