oh, that is just so sad and yet so beautiful. excellent writing.!

Couple typos: ‘the approach’ → they approach
orange an red → orange and red

Interesting bit (haven’t read the previous one). Nice subtle religious references, effective dreamlike quality.

The first paragraph is a bit awkward. The ’she’s in the third sentence took me a minute to process, as did who was crying in the final sentence.

Overall – sweet, with lovely tone

thank you for the critque. and for all the comments. :)

well told story, the pencils apply to the whole. :)

thank you. :)

Nothing like a fall funeral … nicely done. :)