Bit of a weak ‘mature’, I know, but the language is just a tad over my usual limit.

‘burst with wet crimson fire of existence’? really? can’t we make him less verbiose? he is an evil rapist and murderer.. i just never pictured him that way.. but i love that he got bested by some victim.. now if that girl was a cop.. hee hee.

I kind of like my villains to be a bit wordy- the ranting and raving is more entertaining that way. I haven’t read the prequels, but I’m liking this anyway.

I love your insight into the psychotic mind. It’s almost like this is your field of study or something :P

I just don’t feel like she should be engaging him in conversation… you don’t engage the devil, you kill it…he’s been fairly verbose throughout, I think it would mess with his head if she were quiet, and just methodically went about the business of capturing him and maybe brutalizing him a bit

Fair critique, Chaka. I think was just using her as a foil to let him verbalize a bit why he does what he does or what thought process in him somehow justifies and allows his actions.

Yeah, I mean people have been asking you to have him explain himself, but really there is no explanation for true sadists who want to brutalize others. In a story like this I really enjoy for the villain to experience some actual turnabout and be put exactly in the place of the victim. But that’s my taste:) Overall this is a great story line…

i liked how he crawled along the floor and she walked beside him that painted a vivid picture in my mind.

That last paragraph is strong enough to stand on its own. I kinda like the way he gets to tell’ why’.

I liked the THX made him more intellectual again. In the beginning he seemed a bit too “stupid”.