sweet. try breaking the lines up some, it would make it easier to follow the rhythm.

niiice,
just break up the lines.
I’ll change my rating if ya doooo! lol

im a loser you see
with no dignity at all.
i could be happy and modest
but then you ruin it all
I’m dreaming of that tomorrow,
I’m dreaming for that wish,
I’m dreaming i can smile
and
finally
be at bliss
This is how i would break it up, but its good.
Plus tomorrow is misspelled
Welcome to ficly nice pic.
If you get some friends and comment on some stories you should be able to attract some readers nice to meet you.