I love the awkward approach to some kind of climax, that never quite comes…

I don’t know whether the ‘life would conspire…’ line is a bit heavy in comparison to the rest of the fic, and the italics in the last paragraph haven’t gone quite to plan :)

But overall very nice, carries the tone of the haiku well too – interested to see where this will go, MH

Thanks for the comment. I swapped out ‘thwart’ but could not get those italics to work.

you captured the awkwardness of a meeting after several years very nicley.

i enjoyed this very much – thanks for sequelling the haiku ..

boy meets girl – on uncertain ground – the nervous tension of such is well evoked…. lower climbs: a typo?