oooh. i like this. =D

I love how your writing is developing. It;s like your style is blossoming right before our eyes. Like your combing sentences and usiung the passive voice, that is awesome. The whole first paragraph is only two sentences. This story also lets us feel her sense of urgency, and makeing the reader feel things like anxiousness is harder than making them laugh. good story Elsha.

Is Leeto going to rescue her? That would be awesome:) Great story! even sans Leeto

hahaha! not in my plan, but nice idea, chaka! rofl..
this was some sort of weird dream i had.. i had to really try to get the feelings out there that I felt while seeing this in my head, so thanks MJY for your support!
and band, this is right up your alley :)