Okay, cute moment of adolescent friendship here which all fits nicely. The writing itself could use some work. Here are my top two tips, based on this one.
1) Try to do more than just relate events. Add description, emotion, and weight. It does limit how much story can be told in the limited span of 1,024 characters, but it’s generally worth it.
2) Convention requires new paragraphs at the very least with each quotation from a different person. This serves to make it more visually appealing or readable as well as helps for clarity to emphasize that a different person has begun speaking.

cool thx. i’ll edit this story and add those