interesting. but i’m sure someone here could sequal it, but more likely write a prequel. :)

Certainly makes one curious, but I’m torn as to whether that feels enticing or just confusing. I’m pretty sure I got the rough idea, but much of the ambiguity comes in the fact that, if I read it correctly, there are two male characters, both only referred to as ‘he’. I see what you were going for, trying to remain vague, but that felt a step too unclear for me.

Thank you for your insight :)

I’m glad I came back and saw that this was part of a challenge. Challenging, but I wound up really happy with the work that yours inspired. Thanks for entering the challenge and providing the opportunity to defy unsequellability.

@THX~ that was the best compliment EVER…that you found happiness in YOUR work inspired by mine…wow…Thank you.

very vague, i don’t get a clear image at all.. quite a challenge!

I think the confusion comes with the multiple men with no names! I don’t know why, but the overcoat bit just really intrigued me, and the mention of the ‘last place’ added some nice depth… Good job – well written enough to be enjoyable and vague enough to be tricky to add to…

greatc story!

The storyline was a bit disjointed. Left too much to the imagination. I was still sucked in though…rereading it to try to discover more.

The storyline was a bit disjointed. Left too much to the imagination. I was still sucked in though…rereading it to try to discover more.