Just a quick edit. “Once quick glance” should be “One quick glance”. I love the enterchangeable deity/mortal aspect of this.

Man i liked it but i think the only way to get away with that many fatal errors is going to be to break it up in poetry form. because there are like three runons and three sentance fragments. but good story.
Get a pic.

oh yeah, Get a Pic!

Thanks to both of you.
Mighty-Joe, can you please clarify what you mean? I’d love to make it better.
Going to put up a pic now.
Thanks!