Comments on Quick Thinking by illusionistic

ElshaHawk (LoA)

whoa, how long was he out? hmm, so one guy went after Mom..

(note: this sentence is awkward"He screamed in pain as he repelled I tripped him over my legs and he fell onto the group dead.")
- Posted about 10 years ago.
ElshaHawk (LoA)

wait wait, and the caller, who went after her too… and she was standing outside the door…
- Posted about 10 years ago.
illusionistic

I guess the mother is smarter than we were guessing :)
- Posted about 10 years ago.
SJHundak/SJWilling

Nice sequel, got caught out for a second with the type pip where it should have been pipe, and would question the use of repelled “as he repelled” seems to indicate he’s repelling the steam.
“as the steam repelled him” would work better is it indicates the steam is winning.
Nice workaround though, and thoughtful plot.

S.J.
- Posted about 10 years ago.
- 4 out of 5
Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

one down, how many to go?
- Posted about 10 years ago.
- 4 out of 5