dang this was a good start, i was blown away by the last line it really hit close to home.

Beautifully described sequence of events. Definitely felt the tender concern and heartbroken worry. Great job.

The first bit was good. This is WONDERFUL. Horry is even cooler now – caring and the only-too-relatable bearer of that great burden, unrequited love… Human but also captures the emotion fantastically. Blimey I love this.