This is quite dark, but I wouldn’t really worry about marking it mature…

Humdrum, whether it be a bearable one, or the perpetual torture this story illustrates, seems to be a good grounding for these kind of stories, but this does take it a new way :)

All I can say with regards to challenge suitability is that the story of how she gets herself into this circumstance is begging to be told, but, still…

I like the story, it wasn’t particularly a startling revelation at the end but who needs that, sometimes its what happens in the body of the tale that matters.

If you made the sentences shorter, and uspet a few literary geniuses by throwing in a fragment or two here and there, I think you’d be able to really up the tension and make the pace a lot more frantic.

This is the kind of tale where you could have us breathless by the end of it.

S.J.

Apologies should be upset LOL

I agree with SJ and MH’s comments. Also, I find that a title can sometimes hurt a story, by explaining too much of what someone is about to read. This seems to be the case for this story.

the infinite loop. Again.
You have to break the cycle to sequel, or mirror it.