Nice pacing, I love the first two paragraphs with the exception of the phase “slipping and sliding”, its kinda cliche and reminds of my slip’n slide not war heh. I think you could use more descriptive language to strengthen that part.

The ending is good, but feels a little stiff, probably from the lack of word space.

It’s not boring, and that’s a good story.

Good sequel, but felt you could have dropped the last “Burst. Shift fire.” and added addtional line space as twyst suggested.

The edit definately helps with the flow. Thanks.