Sent it to mature for content

you killed them all! freaky marli.. it was kinda quick, too.. maybe add a facial expression…

I liked this series. I had no problem following it and it had to be quick because it WAS.

very sketchy story, lacking in details with too much gratuitous violence for my taste…which is saying alot, since I"m a big fan of the macbre genre. It had a nice supernatural feel that could have been expounded upon a little better.

Yeah, that’d be mature content. I think Krulltar hit in on the head. You came up with a great, macabre, tragic story with that little touch of supernatural (your dead narrator), but you could have played it for more suspense and emotion by fleshing it out a bit more.