Good writing, good characterisation, but… They’re not your characters! Big a ‘Phantom’ fan as I am, I would advise checking the community standards:

http://ficly.com/pages/community

But please don’t just get rid of it – change some character names, create your own world, I enjoyed it :)

Not many stories take place in Paris these days..
Yeah fan fic has its place, but not here with real names.
I’ve not actually seen this opera.. I rarely make it out of my fishbowl.

Well, thanks for pointing that out. I just got rid of it. Didn’t feel like refashioning it without him, though she could have been any one.

Hmm… I’m not sure how it was before, but this tiny tidbit you have now is very intriguing. My only qualm is that it’s too short! I’m itching for more!