I totally dig it, and thank you for being the first person beside bluefish and myself to add to this universe. You are very much encouraged to continue to contribute more (and doubly so if it continues to be this good!)
I really love the story line so far. It really reminds me of some random story generator fiction, which is a compliment. I think you guys, now including THX, are doing great. I wouldn’t interfere with the tapping keys of genius at work.
The Dark Hillbilly, you should feel free to contribute. This is Ficly, after all, and the “Write a Prequel” and “Write a Sequel” links are there for a reason! :D
THX, I would make one small change to the text. If you add quotation marks to this sentence, I think it will make your meaning clearer: