Wonderful (and vivid) imagery. I love the use of disease Rubella, as well as the, lights and tree descriptions that give this a nice “dated” (retro) feel. The title of the story is the cherry on the sundae.
You’ve conveyed the feel of being unwell, and how fevers distort perspective, but all added a certain poignancy of being young and sick at a special time of the year.
Lovely little bit of story. I really liked the undertone of frightening that the spectacle holds for this little kid. Very nicely balanced and authentic.
ElshaHawk (LoA)
Krulltar
Raegan Dauterive
Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)
stargazer1960
dkscully
THX 0477