That’s amazingly well-written. I love the part with the “crumpled edges are tearing”

Another lovely lustrous thing :-)

thanks very much

A very nice piece. I understand putting the single line in but in this case I felt it could work without it.

I read so much in this…well done.

Oh, love the imagery! I like the choice you made for the repeated line. A map- as in something we keep referencing when we are finding our way.
Wonderful.

you do the villanelle very welle!

Very nice use of anaphora. Lovely and hauntingly musical. Has a nice, poetic ambiguity to it.