small niggly: “when it pores” should be “when it pours”. loved it otherwise.

I think the story’s great – especially the last line. Just maybe it would work better without the “i love you” part.

This story needs major revisions. For one thing, I don’t see why the narrator is using the euphemism “busy” about finding her boyfriend with another girl, or why she skips over that scene so quickly. Also, typographical errors abound.