i had something similar in mind only from the man’s POV. and you did it so much more eloquently than I could have managed.

Lovely and nicely wrought. I so thought she was hooked on a drug, but this was great, the addiction of affection and infatuation. Had a mysterious feel throughout.
At the beginning, was ‘puller’ supposed to be ‘pulling’?

yes, thank you, corrected :-)

Wow. That was amazing. Nice work! I agree with THX completely. Very mysterious, I can sense her addiction. Impressive tone.

It has a really thick, sensual feel about it. Lots of layers to explore.

I love that she breathes him in, well done! You have captured the moment perfectly!

I was captured in the moment.

A rousing fourth place for this one! Thanks for entering!

i really love your writing, but the scenario is just so blephhh…. if only you could tighten things up.

hope you like the sequel then ..