i had something similar in mind only from the man’s POV. and you did it so much more eloquently than I could have managed.
Lovely and nicely wrought. I so thought she was hooked on a drug, but this was great, the addiction of affection and infatuation. Had a mysterious feel throughout. At the beginning, was ‘puller’ supposed to be ‘pulling’?
yes, thank you, corrected :-)
Wow. That was amazing. Nice work! I agree with THX completely. Very mysterious, I can sense her addiction. Impressive tone.
It has a really thick, sensual feel about it. Lots of layers to explore.
I love that she breathes him in, well done! You have captured the moment perfectly!
I was captured in the moment.
A rousing fourth place for this one! Thanks for entering!
i really love your writing, but the scenario is just so blephhh…. if only you could tighten things up.
hope you like the sequel then ..
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