now for the sequel where everything goes fubar.

well, the city could be full of robots, instead of real people, or it could be wired to blow up, or they could be victorious, killing this enemy and move on to a more formidable foe. Right Pyro? lol. We are thinking similarly.
This is a great beginning, setting the stage for more. I’d like to see you get into the character’s head, though.

Wonderful descriptions. Keep it going!

i think im going to edit this, thank you all for the comments, i just need to adjust the direction (personal preference).

Edited.