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musicgirl

Joined August 2011.

21 stories, 2 challenges, 100 comments, and 3 friends

I’m looking to improve my writing so any feedback you can give me would be much appreciated!

Stories

  1. The Process

    Waves crash down From parted seas Icy needles Against nerves Flowing over Virgin flesh Slowly splitting A spinning head Freezing heart Deeper into indecision Two voices In each ear Teardrops welling In two eyes Waves crash down From parted seas Grab ea...

  2. The Walk Home

    The wind dances past me, sending chills through my body; the sun not yet up long enough to warm the Earth. The concrete sidewalk pounds at my feet. The street is dead; the houses seem still enough to be vacant and no cars pass by. I feel unwelcome, ali...

  3. Just Jump

    Black water below. I give into gravity. Icy death greets me.

  4. Why?

    What is this body? Tiny blue veins Branching out Beneath Pale skin Uneven eyes Staring through The mirror Staring through Her mind Staring through Her heart Staring through Her life What is this body? Floating thoughts Emotions At the ready On mental...

  5. The Pharmacy Raids

    I looked up to see the sky turning a dark gray. Not a moment later the rain began to fall, burning my skin with each acidic drop. I ducked down and sprinted towards home. The smell of mold and dust hit me as I ran through the door. I climbed the ricket...

  6. Solitary Girl

    I chose the farthest corner possible. Tucked away the best I could manage, I observed the hundreds of people within the food court. Friends grouped together, couples holding hands. Some young, some old. As I scanned the faces within the crowd, I began ...

  7. Appearances

    I’m jolted from sleep by the painfully intrusive sound of the alarm clock. My heart sinks with the acknowledgement of being brought back to reality. My hand immediately goes to my stomach, and I feel its distention from the sweets eaten last nigh...

  8. The Morning Nightmare

    I walked across the dingy carpet of the lobby and down the ill-lighted hall. My coworkers passed by, each flashing a quick smile or giving a subtle wave. The pressure of deadlines left little time for conversation. Passing the break room, the smell of ...

  9. Inexplicable

    Glistening eyes hold joyful tears Time freezes for a while Hands grasped tightly to each other Faces locked in smiles Love bursts into a sea of light Across a midnight sky Embers glowing red with fire Two hearts’ sparks do fly

  10. Now Be Polite

    She was incredibly thin, almost unhealthy looking. Her chest was flatter than any girl’s I had ever seen, poor thing. There was something else strange about her, I just couldn’t put my finger on it. Her face was completely caked in makeup, ...

  11. People Watcher

    I sat at a table near the edge of the food court and watched the crowds walk by. There were mostly families, along with the occasional group of teenagers and dolled up twenty-somethings. I glanced down at my cell phone. 5 minutes late. I looked around,...

  12. He Knew The Whole Time

    We’re too young to die he would always say before we were about to do something stupid, a sort of reassurance that nothing bad would happen, a motto I came to live by. We went to a lot of parties. We drank. We smoked. We snorted. We shot up. And ...

  13. Kept

    Soft, yellow cotton Ripped to four sides Remembered once whole Tattered at feet From fabric Longer than little legs Stained at sleeves From spills And mistakes Warming at heart Each stitch Screaming past Clung to present Fragmented and fragile Neatly l...

  14. Brought To Light

    Rose stomped toward the window, leaned against the wall, and let out a discontented sigh. We had been sitting in that dank room for nearly four hours. “I just don’t understand it!” she shouted. “Julia wouldn’t just run off...

  15. Through the Eyes of High Society

    Blood ran red through the halls. The new paint recently applied was ruined. The carpets would take days to be cleaned. It had been a truly dreadful murder, such a well-to-do man. That ill-mannered wife of his finally lost it, stabbed him 8 times, then ...

  16. Followed Too Far

    The first time I laid eyes on Vincent was the last time I stood in sunlight. It was a warm, summer day. We were both in the woods. I was sitting in a patch of sun that flickered upon the ground as the trees above swayed. He stood beneath a large oak tr...

  17. In His Mind

    The cake, delivered. Her dress, she’s putting on now. The crowd, they’re waiting. Voices always speaking. Words embodying anxiety. Killing Every Little Thought. STOP! ….Too much. Heart is racing faster than thought possible. &#...

  18. A Conversation

    “I’ve been thinking about leaving,” he told me. His eyes stared into nothingness, straying from reality. his face was coated with filth he hadn’t bothered to clean off in weeks. I could tell he wasn’t well. I felt my heart...

  19. Meeting

    I swear my heart lifted the moment I laid eyes upon him. He stood solemnly, silently, among a room of conversations and laughter. I stayed quiet too, biting my lower lip to keep from smiling about his handsomeness, Trying to steady my breath as I thoug...

  20. A Lovely Cliche

    You’ve split my heart wide open And with each word gently flowing from your lips My soul is filling with devotion It’s the look in your eyes And the sound of your heart beating within mine As we wish we weren’t saying goodbye Love fil...

  21. To Love

    It came soaked in tears Covered in blood And weighted by fears It came fallen and broke Alone and unsure Clung only to hope It came from a long, winding road Lost and misguided Yet, onward it strode It devoured despair And picked up the heart That lied...

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